Nice job! What I'm hearing is that you could work on singing more legato.
You're emphasizing your consonants a bit heavily.
For example, in lost boy I heard: "When I-ee Was a Chil-D".
One thing I would recommend is singing the melody of the phrase on a "Mum".
Once you've sung the melody on Mum, sing it again but try to emphasize just the "uh" of the word, with minimal emphasis on the "m".
Finally, take that smooth "uh" feeling and apply it to the song.
By emphasizing the vowels more, the line of the song will sound more smooth and legato.
Using the lost boy example, we might hear:
"w-EH-n AH-ee w-AH-s AH ch-AH-EE-ld"
Of course, regular voice lessons will help you sing legato across your whole range. But this should get you going.
Re: Requesting review/tips/critique 16:22 on Thursday, September 07, 2017