No harm but that was pretty bad ha ha

The best thing to do is to give your self time to write your song. Don`t go in thinking about writting sad or happy or any thing else. just sit down with a pen paper and a guitar/bass/keyboard/ tin whistle what ever...

Put your self in a room with no distractions, no tv/radio. and set yourself a time frame, give your self say 30 mins and dont try to force it... use this time everyday at the same time, get into a routine say 10.00 every day for 30 mins 20mins, dosent matter.

And dont expect instant result`s either...

You`ll also tend to find taht somedays you can churn out tons of lyrics, melodys and riffs, whereas others you tend to only be able to come up with one line. I`m having a month like that at the moment!!

The best thing to do is to just keep at it and eventually a kick ass song will develop!

Open up tis wall and fill it in,
The void pushes me back,
Angered by a life you were forced to live,
One i could never hack.

And as i turn around again,
Its a different view from before,
Two glistnening greens pools,
Lit up by your smile.

Don`t be afraid of my generosity,
It is only what you deserve,
Talking through glazed windows,
But you are so close to me.

And as i turn around again,
Its a different view from before,
Two glistnening greens pools,
Lit up by your smile.

Can`t help but turn around again,
To see the view i love,
Two glistening pools,
Staring into my eyes.

good charlotte rock theier the best o luv i joel

yo
my opinion of the latest song written by Flee, is that it looks like hes making improvements (if you read the first lyrics).

although im not in a band myself, i believe you guys can learn from my opinion. write about your emotions, thats what people listen too. they dont want a sell out. you need to have the right emotion when you`re singing. Listen to Marilyn Manson song, then listen to HIM songs, notice any difference? These two bands` lyrics are backed up by the emotion going threw the singer and the music. Without the right emotions going through you, your voice will sound different to the lyrics you`re speaking (its not hard to understand. just try speaking like a bouncer and feeling afraid and scared on the inside, just try it, it wont sound right... see?)

So if you wanna write a love, happy song, go relax for 20 minutes listening to classical music (i know you dont want to and will probably ignore this part, but do you want your lyrics to sound right or crap? by the way, actually listen to the music and hide the cd so your friends dont find it).

Love songs are all relaxing. Which means the lyrics need to have a flow to it. Angry songs have less intelligent lyrics. You just need to appear hard and tough for songs such as the ones written by heavy metal bands, lyrics dont matter for angry songs just need to act and sound angry.

Not trying to be overly judgemental but depressing lyrics are incredibly hard to write to a high standard that doesnt sound cheesy. Unfortunately the cheese factor seems to be reigning supreme on this forum. Why dont u try to really assess ur own lyrics, without relying on other peoples opinions (mine included), cus I think thats the only way u really learn to be critical of your own work and take it to the next level. Also I think its good to constantly compare ur work to outher lyricists u respect.
kurt cobains work is still a good starting point(everyone disagree!) to see what ur up against. simple but with a real intelligence underlying it.
feel free to hate me, but I think Iam just being honest......

hey, im just made a band but not only can i not think of a name but im havin trouble writin lyrics too. i came up with this. its a prototype and needs changin but here goes...

Impact



In the dark, without light,
Without life nor sight,
Comes the sun, dark not bright.

Fire burns, darkness reigns
Corruption of your brain,
In this cage, bound tight to your brain,
A loss of free will.

Blinded eyes never closed, when the image glows,
The will to live and breathe stops

Now I have discovered what you mean to me,
Freedom,
And the violence caused such silence,
Freedom,
You’re my only light on a horizon of black,
But when you turn your back, I prepare for the impact.

I’m a prisoner of my mind,
When we are one life is always kind,
Look back on times when we used to be,
If I was there id be mentally free.

Now I have discovered what you mean to me,
Freedom,
And the violence caused such silence,
Freedom,
You’re my only light on a horizon of black,
But when you turn your back, i prepare for the impact.

Now I have discovered what you mean to me,
Freedom,
And the violence caused such silence,
Freedom,
You’re my only light on a horizon of black,
But when you turn your back, i prepare for the impact.

dude life is great man your living your not screwed your not in jail...be like happy damnit!!!stop wrting about this depressing stuff these emo kids are all talking about how happy l ife is.....its alll about what your feeling if your happy because you got laid...write about t hat....if ur mad coz your mom is a biatch write about that...and even if u end up writing about depressing songs.....make it real make it real!if its you its music from the heart

How to write a song...

First off, most bands out there don`t realise this but it is just as easy to make an energetic `HAPPY` song as it is to write a depressing, ..my girlfriend left me and life is sh`t song... infact it may even be easier... But bands like Korn, slipknot, disturbed etc etc usualy have a degraded background or some form of depressing story to tell and this is what influences their music, their inspiration has been limited to past experience... How many new age metal bands can you name that don`t claim to have had crap happen to them in their past???
To write `HAPPY` but at the same time energetic think of some thing good, say `your first car` not something depressing...
i.e. don`t make links to past derogatry elemnt of life, as in this line: "I am going insane (3) as this pressure(2) turns into(1) pain...` HOW DEPRESSING! It`s a bad experience of being over pressurised by say pere`s or such... Think positive.. as I said First car, take that experince + a little hyperbole... and put in a few lexical choices such as `burn`, `road`, `raz`... e.g. start with say `BUUUURRRRRNNNNN...add a guitar solo and then `Man, machine as one, kiss my £$$$ i`ll take on anyone...`....
And so on, use lexical relations to help.. Anyway hopoe that helped, for more help on song composing Mail me at gizartious@hotmail.com, I will soon be opening a website I hope for a mates band where I will create a permenant `queries` page on help with song writing so keep in touch, that goes to anyone out there stuck!
(NOTE: () denotes puse in seconds between words/sentences)

Here`s a song that I wrote:

These days they seem so empty,
when there`s nowhere left to go,
you can`t find a place to stand
you aonder why you`re all alone
nobody seems to care about you,
no matter how far you roam

now you wish of a better place
where everything doesn`t seem so hard
You can`t find a way arond it
you can`t find that better path
you`ve been like this for so long now
but you still don`t know the right way home

chorus:
sometimes i feel so low
like there`s nowhere left in the world to go
if i could find the right baby,
then i`d be alright
through all these lonely, lonely nights,

Well you dream about things to come
like changes in your life
you still can`t make those dream come true
you gotta find a way
you`re runnin` round these empty fields
but noone wants to show you the right way

Chorus followed by solo

Oh what will become of this?
will we ever find a way?
I know there must be something?
waiting out there for me
baby i know i will find a way

repeat chorusx2 then fade out

E-mail me at bobs_your_uncle_11@hotmail.com telling me what you think of it, it was my first song written, not my best but yeah

like a lot of u im also in a rock band and ive been chosen(by the band) to write the lyrics but i av no idea wat 2 write can anyone give me advise(or if u want, write the whole song 4 me, lol)

fine if no 1 wants 2 help me

any 1 want to help me wit my song ???

I`m new I read over the rest of the topic and i think this is a pretty cool forum. What do you think of this. It`s a mainly instrumental song but I want the lyrics to rock. This is hopefully going to be my bands big song. It`s sung a little bit like "Smashing Pumpkins".



My fleshy husk of soul
You dream about yourself
And my unbridled feelings
Comatose upon the shelf

Prechorus
It`s not like you killed someone
You opened up my heart
And drove a spear into it`s side
Now I will disappear

Chorus (Up tempo)
So come and give me one more smile
Take the bit and you run wild
Steal the fear of fear away
Tears of joy past everyday

The lies of the truth serum
Play hard against my mind
Your beauty jails my freedom
With words that I can`t find

Prechorus
Chorus

Convicted by your pain
I hate the way I like it
My reality is stained
But that`s the way you made it

Prechorus
Chorus

And your all the way up there
Come back down to me
And the letters that you never wrote
Got tossed and thrown away

And we never knew the reasons why

Chorus

make someing in your life bad and good.
and someing like